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Proposal: System approach for greening the conventional agribusiness Contest: Exploring Synergistic Solutions for Sustainable Development Thank you for your contest entry, System approach for greening the conventional agribusiness. We appreciate your willingness to share your ideas, and also the time and effort you put into developing a proposal and submitting it to the
The proposal to build 'green' agricultural producer union and 'green' consumer union in four rural districts in Sri Lanka is potentially interesting. However, this version needs a lot of work because as it currently stands it is neither clear, persuasive or appealing. I suggest the authors rewrite the proposal focused squarely on one plan - I suspect the agricultural producers union is best. Describe what is meant by green - low carbon? organic? fair trade? etc? Remove much from the proposal that is only tangential, or make clear how it is linked (things like the gift economy). This proposal will need a lot of work focusing on a clear project. Also, in revising, better align content to the call by indicating which previous CoLab proposals are relevant and incorporated and which SDG's will are being targeted. Furthermore, it feels like a singular solution rather than an integrated set of initiatives. I think that this proposal could be of benefit to other proposals and suggest that it maybe combine to strengthen one of the other proposals
Jan 29, 2018
We accepted your value comment and I was much helpful to revise our proposal. We are new for climate colab . We feel that although we have new Idea, We have low communication capacity in English. But will develop it gradually.